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=exposition moderation 14/2/11= walt: we are assessing our skills in writing an exposition. should Greytown school have extra curriculum activities such as music dance drama and sports? .... WHAT I THINK: I don’t think so because it will take the children out of there learning then instead of doing dance and sports and music and the teachers get payed for getting the laptops and instead they just don’t use them and just but play with music and do dance and other stuff and they wont be able to learn math and reading and all the proper school stuff there just doing music and they can do music in a session. But whats more important is the maths and the reading and the other stuff but maybe they could bring a work sheet home that said learn about music and dance and all the other stuff and when they are older they wont know how to use laptops and do maths and how to do recount but lucky Greytown school we do. writhing reading maths use laptops dance cause we have time for all those things but if we don't fit them in we do it tomorrow or the next day and we try our best to fit every thing in and do those thing but other schools don’t do reading and writhing and all the things that Greytown school has and thanks to the teachers we are going to be ready for collage but maybe at collage we might do dance and test and most of the things we will know what types of sports do we do:

.minnie ball basketball rugby 7s soccer netball dog ball and heaps of other

we go on camp and all sorts we don’t need all that dancing and music and sports cause we have got them and cause there are places that do all of those things.

The 4 pic story ￼￼ A buggy has picked a spoon of a dinner table and flew off to the outside world why dose it have the spoon i do not know why the buggy ran away? I know why the buggy ran away said the little girl were is my spoon that’s why the buggy ran away because it wonted to get to the spoon to eat the milk with out of the cats bowl and the cats sleeping that is why the cause the buggy wont’s something to eat cause its hungry that’s why i go find the budggy i ran up the stairs and got my jacket and my shoes and ran and said i be back mum and dad i promise i wont get lost bye darling said mum and dad bye i said as i walked out the door i toke the first step and i was already scared but then i said to my self ill be ok i promised my self that as i set off on my journey. Then it got darker and darker i got sleepy and then sudenly i feel asleep then i woke up there i heard a voice this girl fell asleep on the pavement then all a sudden i woke up i saw a strange man with a blue shirt on i thought i new him for somewere then i came to me it was the police they had found me there was my my mum and dad Samantha they said in a quite voice we were worried sick then there was my own blood all around me i said to mum will i die and she said no stop being silly your fine. The next day i had the strangest dream ever i dream that there was a cat sleeping with a cat i was weird then mum called from the kitchen breckfast is ready samantha hurry up get ready for school okay i said to mum i got dressed quickly then i ran down the stairs for breckfast i said good morning and i asked were is dad i said to mum and mum said that she had to go to england for a work trip why could’nt he bring us as i said to mum in a slow sad voice mum said that he could but he thought that it would be a little far for you sweet heart mum said then i ran u the stairs and grab my phone then i put in the number as quick as i could then hit the talk button and then i dad picked up the phone and in one breath i said were are you i thought you were going to bring me and mum were with you are you but sweet heart just pulled out the drive way then you better come back her right now then he said why sweet heart because i wont to come i wont to explore the world then he said then tell you and your mum to get packing cause your going to england thanks dad your the best i love you bye then i ran down the stairs then i said to mum that we were going to england mum said lets go and get packed sweet heart i would love to come on so we ran straight away so there we were on that very fun day setting off to go to england mum mum dads here hurry up there was no sound in the house mum were are you mummy then i ran up the stairs to find her then all a sudden i woke up and said to my self i was a sleep it was a dream then i opened the curtains and then i saw i was scared we were in the sky i held mum tight she said to me that were nearly there and i was so happy that i was bouncing up and down on the airplane then i said how long did it take to get here mum said 1 day and 24 hours and we have still got a bit more yet we have to get on the train now to they landed at the airport and then they said get a taxi and then go to the train station and then they will take you to england then hope off at the nerest place to your train station so we did that then we caort a taxi to our house we are staying it was snowy there and could we were so tried that we had some food and went to bed but that night i could not get to sleep just that night i was so excited that i was to tired to cope the next day then we when for a walk when we got ready and i spotted some mushrooms and then we walk so fair that i saw the owasis and it looked so butieful i wonted to live there for ever then dad said tommrow i have to go to work but if you and your mum wont to you can look at the shops and go bye some stuff thats were it all started the fun stuff i shouted yah thank you da i said to dad then we set off hme then the next day thats when the fun began

exposition moderation 14/2/11 name: walt: we are assessing our skills in writing an exposition. should Greytown school have extra curriculum activities such as music dance drama and sports? .... WHAT I THINK: I don’t think so because it will take the children out of there learning then instead of doing dance and sports and music and the teachers get payed for getting the laptops and instead they just don’t use them and just but play with music and do dance and other stuff and they wont be able to learn math and reading and all the proper school stuff there just doing music and they can do music in a session. But whats more important is the maths and the reading and the other stuff but maybe they could bring a work sheet home that said learn about music and dance and all the other stuff and when they are older they wont know how to use laptops and do maths and how to do recount but lucky Greytown school we do. writhing reading maths use laptops dance cause we have time for all those things but if we don't fit them in we do it tomorrow or the next day and we try our best to fit every thing in and do those thing but other schools don’t do reading and writhing and all the things that greytown school has and thanks to the teachers we are going to be ready for collage but maybe at collage we might do dance and test and most of the things we will know what types of sports do we do:

.minnie ball basketball rugby 7s soccer netball dog ball and heaps of other

we go on camp and all sorts we don’t need all that dancing and music and sports cause we have got them and cause there are places that do all of those things.

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illusions

It was Tuesday 22 of July 1995

I was so happy we were almost home, I looked out of the helicopter window beside me, seeing all the smoke and fire underneath the chopper I new we had won. Then we started to land. Yay I thought I would be able to see my friends again.That afternoon we had arrived we had lunch in the park and then we went to the mall for shopping!

But then it all changed.

I woke up with sore back and cramp, as soon as my eyes had opened I heard the driver yell “Mayday, Mayday! were going down” the alert button next to me was flashing red and white, I new this wasn’t a good sign,the chopper was out of control it almost felt like there was zero gravity,Then something unexpectedly tripped me up. I woke up, I could Smell all around me something was definitely wrong! I looked beside me my friend Simmons I thought was okay but as soon as I tryed to wake him up he rolled over, I looked at his pale white skin with tears running down my eyes.Every one around me was dead Iv got to get out of here I said to my self,As i was trying to get out of busted chopper I could smell gasoline, once I got out of the chopper I ran as fast as I could a big explosion behind me made me trip over and land on the sand head first. Then I couldn’t breath and my shoulder was hurting and so I went to get some grass and then rap my arm in it and then started to be better.

I didn’t know were I was, some sort of deserted place in the middle of know where. Luckily I had a compass in my pocket, so north must be that way but the compass was every were I think was busted from the sand, Oh man how am i gonna get out of this one I said out loud,but then in the distance was something shiny,sparkling in my eye as it got closer i began to see it more clearly, a bird whats a bird doing all the way out here oh no the illusions are already started iv only spent a couple of hours out here, But then then it dropped something on my head a spoon in fact, I was so confused Ill just keep this just in case well the good thing is that i’m not delirious yet i muttered.

I was so tired the scorching hot sun was like as painful as a bullet going through my back I was lucky that I remembered to bring 2 bottles of water I said to myself but when I looked in my pack, they were in their but they were empty. oh no both of my bottles were almost empty oh no I’m gonna die out here but as I wiped the tears of my nose I saw something else in the distance this time I definitely new I this was a mirage, but I ran to it anyway thinking at least in my dreams something good was happening, a big pool of cooling water I jumped in I was so happy to have water i was so thirsty, I filled up both of my drink bottles, but then it felt weird for a moment and then the oasis had gone, It was just angrily i said to my self,but then I looked behind me the oasis was right there how could i have missed it? i said to myself.So i filled up my drink my bottles up to the top once i had finished i stumbled across these t lovely looking mushrooms,as my hand went out to grab them someone said “hay don't grab me!” what oh no talking mushrooms not again, Wait maybe they can help me get out of here. “well you may not no it but the rescue helicopter is for as we speak so better keep your ears and eyes out”.

Doesn’t it ever rain here I yelled as hard as I could but all i could her was my echoing.As I was waking through the dessert I tripped of a rock that was planted in the ground oh great, sand in my eyes as I was was brushing the sand off my face I heard a little sound in the background I knew what it was it was the helicopter looking for me, even though I had no energy I still ran towards it I knew I was getting out of this nightmare as the paramedic’s were helping me on the helicopter I stumbled to my knees not knowing that I had blacked-out.

I woke up in a plain white bed I was in hospital there was a person sitting next to me “your awake” a quit voice said Man I thought it was my dad but it was the doctor but I was just having a crazy dream “wait did all that actually happen” I asked, “yes you had a pretty rough time didn’t you” he replied. Wait! what do you mean?” well all these weird things happened to me in the desert”how weird”... yea, it was weird.

The Next day we left and then we got home with jetlag! and we slept all day long! Then we got up and then we went shopping for food. I was starving, yay food!! It had felt like I hadn’t eating in a year all I could taste in my mouth was sand from the oasis.

25.5.11 Walt: write an exposition

Should I be allowed to design my bedroom the way i wont to ??? People should be able to have their bedrooms the way they want. Do you think Mr Andrew would like pink frilly curtains with teddy bears all around the room? This is the time were you have to stand up for your self and say to your parents that i am a (big boy or girl) and i need to have my room the way i wont it.

My room is a bit to babyish for me and i do not feel comfortable and warm in it. I feel in it i feel like a princess and i don’t wont to feel like a princess i wont to feel like a big girl do you get what i mean ? We don’t have teddy’s and baby dolls and ABC poster or C.D ‘s that sing Twinkle Twinkle little star and all the baby things, it just not right so now is the time to stop. Don’t you think ? Normal people get there room the way they want it, not the way their parents want it. It should be a warm fuzzy place where they feel safe. but kids are always saying can i get some cool things for my room and then they end up not getting it because there parents say NO and then the kids go but my room is dumb and boring. This is were you have to say to your parents that i have to grow up now and you need to stop acting like i am a baby and all this fairy stuff its just not right okay then they finally give in and they say so what do you wont in your room stars and then i say no that is what we just said no to okay draw a plan for us so we can say yes or no okay but no yuck stuff so there i right and draw and then i get the perfect plan and then you get the perfect room. But mum’s is always complaining do you wont your room changed round and then you have got to say okay so you change your room around and mum says here is a present its from me and your dad and you take it and you are so surprised and then it is just a boring old doll to play with and then you pull a face and say thanks. So then your room is back the way it was the way you wonted it. This is the way i wont my room the way i wont it: Pink and Black stripes with my name in 3D with a Pink bunk bed and heaps of photos around my room. Hope you get your room the way you wont it.

By chantelle



This is some work we had to do in class and Molly and I finshed it and i hope you like it.

Mystery Writer

One day I was going to the beach to meet my friends and when I was walking along the beach I saw this old boat covered in moss and leaves and sand. As I walked around the boat I noticed a name on the side of a boat, as I rubbed off some of the sand I saw the words more clearly. It said the jolly roger. Minutes later my friends arrived and we went out for a smoothie and then I told them about this boat I found. I told them and they said lets see this boat of your’s. No no I said its not mine so we walked over to the boat and they said well why don’t we ask your dad to come and take a look and if he wants it we will take it home. Okay I said so we walked back to the house and we got dad and then we walked to the beach. Then he saw the boat he said this is a very old boat its called the jolly roger. Dad I said can we take the boat home? I don’t know son i’ll ring your mother. So dad rang her and she said okay but we don’t have anything to take the boat home. I’ll ring my friend Jane and Mike they are sure to have something to take the boat home. So while dad was on the phone we went around and around the beach and then when dad was off the phone dad said to us Jane and Mike are coming down now and and they are bringing something to clean the boat so we can have a turn on it before we go home. I said to my friends when do you have to go home? They said I don’t know one of my friends asked you if you wanted to stay the night at my house and then I asked dad and he said ring up your mum and then see what she says. So I rang up mum and she said that would be nice do you wont to and I said absolutely i would love to okay let your friend ring up his mum and see if its still alright okay mum love you okay bye now so i handed the phone over to my friend and he said thank you should i ring her up and i said yes so my friend ran his mum up and she said said hello Hun hi mum how are you i was just wondering if my friend could come to stay the night tonight his mum said yes okay love you mum bye so we got the boat and had a play on the boat and then we went home as i got my stuff ready my friend said do you wont to come to my house and i said yeah bro and do you like me and i said if i did not i wont not of came to stay so the next day me and my friend woke up and we decided to go to my house and go to the beach and play on the boat so i packed my stuff up and my friends mum dropped us off at the gate and we walked up and i said thank you for having me when we got a bit closer to the house i noticed something that the boat was not there so i told my friend we ran into the house and screamed dad dad dad came running out and he said what what is the matter kids and we both said were is the boat!!! Dad said we decided me and your mum that we can not look after the boat i said were is it and he said we sold it to Jane and Mike me and my friend said we are going to get it back so i dropped all my stuff and walked to Jane and mikes finally we got there and we asked them for the boat back they said but your dad sold it to us but we wont it back sorry but no well we got it finders keepers losers weepers they said in a loud voice and dad came walking up the drive and said to Jane and Mike hey guys um we would like the boat back please okay well I guess so but if i give it back can we go out and have a long go on it please okay dad said well ill bring a picnic for us okay we all said okay kids lets go back to the house and get some breakfast and then well ask mum if she would like to come so we got back to the house and mum was asleep so i quietly sneaked in room and write her a note when i was going out the door she woke up and said hunnie why are you up this early and why are you in my room um I was going to ask if you would like to come on the boat with us okay hunnie who else is coming um just Jane and Mike is that okay yep sure ill be down there in a minute okay mum and we are making some breakfast for you thanks hunnie. I ran down into the kitchen again and //I// made breakfast for my friend and then we went outside and washed down the boat.After we finished washing down the boat we went inside and we go into some old cloths and dad said since it’s the holidays maybe we could book some were to stay my friend and I said that would be great dad but we have to ring up my mum my friend said so we rang up my friends mum and then we asked her really nicely and she said yes she said do you wont me to drop you some cloths off and I said yes please so mum came round at 8.00am so i toke my cloths and said goodbye and then she said bye so at 10.00am we set off on our little holiday it toke 7 hours and we finally got to were we wonted to the first thing we did was got lunch and then we went to the motel it was quite a nice motel we had a little explore and then we went and brought some food we got heaps of junk food and hen we went back to the motel and we unpacked the stuff and my friend and I we ate the chocolate and drank the fizzy then we went and found out were the beach was and then after 5 days we went back home and then my friend went home and it was late so I went to sleep.

By Chantelle

Ginger princess

One day there was this one baker that you could never get a better baker in the whole wide world then this peticular day the baker said I am going to make a ginger princess then we have to get an recipe said the baker wife so they went down to the recipe shop and brought a ginger bread recipe i thought that we could turn things around said the baker to make this ginger bread princess ok sweet heart said the baker wife. Don’t burn your self sweet heart okay darling please go away now ok said the wife. Were should i start ok ill start by making a plan so there i was busy in the study then all a sudden i had the best idea i had ever thought of then i started of by rolling the dough and then i made a shape of a princess then the baker put the princess in the oven and when he turn the heat up to the 150 dergess on the oven the highs of them all but the baker leaft the oven open just a crack and the little ginger princess got out of the oven and ran down the road and sang run run as fast as you can you carnt catch me im the ginger bread man so there he ran down the lane to the river and there was a fox that was hunting for fish then he turned around and there he saw me i was so scared i was just about to cry then all of a sudden he said to me do you wont help across the river then hop on my back princess that very kind fox but i think ill jump on a leaf said the princess but princess don’t do that fine you can take me on your back so go on jump on princess okay there we go so we were going over the river then all a sudden there was the baker shouting to the fox you stupied fox come here you toke the ginger princess by mistake said the baker then all a sudden the fox said the ginger princess is going to be crushed up in my mouth and then the princess jumped off the foxes back and said run run as fast as you can you carnt catch me im the ginger bread man hahaha said the princess as she ran then all a sudden i saw this big cow fat and chubby cow

Mystery Writer Story

Rain. I wake up to hear it bucketing down on the roof. I turn over to look at my calender. It’s Friday the 13th.

My mate Bob and I have a weekly tradition. Every Friday we take to the seas in our little red catamaran. Even though it’s pelting down with rain, the boat is battered and the paint has been abraded by years of rough weather, Bob and I decide to proceed with our weekly tradition, as we believe our little red catamaran can battle the rain.

I gather my belongings and trudge along the cobblestone path. When I arrive at the beach, I am greeted by large, colossal waves smashing against the nearby dock. I can only just make out our little red catamaran, getting battered the waves. Bob is frantically trying to stop the catamaran getting swallowed by the out of control water. I can see he is already drenched through. I sprint towards him along the gloopy sand, my shoes sinking. Once we are both safely in the boat, we crack a drink and set off to sea.

We are now out far enough where the water is calmer and the storm has eased. We drop the sail and decide to sacrifice our sence and go for a dive deep down into the ocean. As my body enters the icy cold water, it sends a shiver up my spine. As I dive deeper something catches my eye. I swim closer and discover something that is leaving the sand unsettled. Its silver bolts that have a slight case of rust and the burnt colour of the chest create something quite out of the ordinary. A large padlock prevents me from opening the chest there and then, so Bob and I decide to go back to shore, collect the right gear and come back later.

Hours later, Bob and I are back in the little red catamaran, bobbing along the water. It’s hard to believe that just hours ago, the sea was heaving to and fro, as thought it were trying to imitate a some wild rocking horse. As we sail through the glass like sea, Bob and I decide that I will dive down to the chest, place the hook through the padlock and Bob will reel it up to the catamaran. Thankfully, because the water is so clear, we can see the chest sitting in the sand below us. As I dive down into the calm water, I am instantly relaxed. I hook the chest, give a tug on the rope and it starts to ascend. As we are now safely in the boat with the chest, we set off towards home. We heave the chest through my front door and collapse in the living room. Bob goes in search for a crow bar, running and jumping at the same time with happiness. He returns soon enough, bursting with excitement. We are both grinning with curiosity as we are so excited to see what is inside. The second we open the chest, our faces drop with disappointment. All the hard work we put in to retrieve the chest simply goes down the drain as we discover the contents. Rocks. Stupid, pointy, worthless, rocks. That is all the chest contains.

It is now twilight, and Bob and I are laying on our deck chairs looking out towards the beach. The waves are calm and the sky is a swirl of abstract colours.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Droid Sans; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“Man, this day has been full of bad luck, don’t you think Bob?” I enquire. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Droid Sans; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“Yes, but after all, it is Friday the 13th. I guess this day had always been destined for bad luck!”

= Glizy gems = = WALT: Read a report and distinguish facts from opinion = = Facts: = = Most diamonds don't have a colour they are clear = = A cut in a diamond gives the them a shape = = a hand full of hair can make a few diamonds = = Diamonds are so hard they can cut through glass = = Diamonds are crystals = = Opinions: = = I think that gems and beautiful and I wont to know how to make gems with my hair !!! = = =

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